Te Kauru Camp (Writing 2nd Draft)
The entrance was amazing,colourful buildings and lots of places to go. It was our second day at Auckland we arrived at Rainbows- End. But one rid caught my eye,the Stratosphere. At first I thought it looked harmless and small but that was because I was at the entrance still.As we walked closer and closer it begun to get lager. My whole group raced to the stratosphere staring at it in shock. 
wow you done great on this peace of writing it's got a few spelling mistakes in it though but still great
ReplyDeleteAwesome!! this was so enthusiastic to read!
ReplyDeleteA really cool piece of writing that hooked me in, you may want to check your spelling mistakes before you post it though, come comment on my writing:)
ReplyDeletegreat story chill those are some cool photo too.And the stratosphere was cool.
ReplyDeletegreat job in vocab and coulor for your lettering and overall great job
ReplyDeleteGreat work Chilli remember to re-read your writing but all in all you have done a great gob.
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like you really wanted to go on the stratosphere and you finally got to.
ReplyDeleteIn the second picture when you are on the stratosphere you look very relaxed and are not worrying about a thing.
Your reflection of rainbows end was awesome but all you need to add is just a little bit more of writing but besides that you did great.
ReplyDeleteHi Chilli my name is Sweyde from Tautoro School.I went to Rainbows End and it was cool. My favorite ride I like the most is the bumper cars. Because I can bump people over. See you later.
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DeleteYou eleborated alot on your blog good job.
ReplyDeleteany other ride you went on? that must of been scary. I think I should of gone on the stratoshpere.
ReplyDeletewhat a good piece of writing chilli just double check your writing but apart from that nice job (:
ReplyDeleteI bet that was one of the best camps ever my advice would be to check your spelling otherwise that was great.
ReplyDeleteHow long ago did you go on this Camp ?